The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
This
line graph illustrates the comparison data about the fast food
consumption
of teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a period of 25 years. In brief , the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
declined over the period,
whereas
the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased. Turning to the
detail
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, in 1975, the most popular fast food
with
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Australian teenagers was
fish
and
chips
, being eaten 100 times a
year
.
This
was far higher than Pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a
year
.
However
, apart from a brief rise again from 1980 to 1985, the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
gradually declined over the
25
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year
timescale to finish at just under 40. In sharp contrast to
this
, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels. Pizza
consumption
increased gradually until it overtook the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
in 1990. It
then
leveled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers as the occasions they were eaten increased sharply throughout the
1970’s
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1970s
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and
1980’s
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1980s
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, exceeding that of
fish
and
chips
in 1985. It finished at the same level that
fish
and
chips
began, with
consumption
at 100 times a
year
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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