The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The line graph demonstrates the
number
of Australians Use synonyms
that
took part in physical activities at a social centre from 2000 to 2020. Correct pronoun usage
who
Overall
, despite not experiencing any significant fluctuation, film Linking Words
Use synonyms
club
always attracted Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
most
denizens throughout the period shown. Correct article usage
the most
Furthermore
, the dramatic rise of the table tennis players and the drop of dramatics learners were perceptible.
In 2000, there were about 65 residents in the film Linking Words
club
, which was the highest Use synonyms
number
among Use synonyms
five
activities. Following that, the martial arts Correct article usage
the five
club
consisted of about 37 members, which was about 10 and 20 participants higher than the figure for amateur dramatics and table tennis respectively. At Use synonyms
this
time, no individual took part in musical performances.
Over the next 20 years, the Linking Words
number
of denizens who joined the film Use synonyms
club
remained quite stable and ended the period at Use synonyms
the
similar Correct article usage
a
number
compared to the beginning, which was still the highest Use synonyms
number
. Another activity that Use synonyms
also
witnessed little change is martial arts, which had the same Linking Words
number
of people doing Use synonyms
this
as in 2000. In terms of table tennis participants, after remaining steady for 10 years, it surged and became the second most popular activity with around 55 playersLinking Words
..
The increase Replace the punctuation
.
...
of
musical performers was Change preposition
in
also
noticeable when it climbed from zero participants to almost 20 performers. Linking Words
Finally
, amateur dramatics seemed to lose its attractiveness when just about 10 people Linking Words
doing
it in 2020.Wrong verb form
did
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