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Task 1: The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 graph illustrates the proportion of tourists
in
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on
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 Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 the total number of visitors increased constantly over the
eight year
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eight-year
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 period.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the
numer
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number
 of
cruise
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 ship
travelers
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travellers
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 showed dynamic changes
compare
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compared
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 to other ones. In terms of those who
staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
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 ships and
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island
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islands
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 began at around 0.75 and 0.25
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millions
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million
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 respectively. From 2010 to 2011 vacationers staying on
cruise
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 ships
icreased
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increased
 by nearly 0.25
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millions
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million
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,
while
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people
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 who
staying
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stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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 remained unchanged. Between 2015 and 2016, the number of
people
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 visiting on
island
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 overtook those
people
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 staying on
cruise
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 ships. Throughout
entire
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the entire
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 period,
although
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 the total number of tourists began at
1million
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1 million
, it went up by
2.5millions
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2.5 million
,
result
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resulting
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 in
this
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 proportion
reached
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reaching
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peak
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the peak
a peak
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 of 3.5
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millions
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million
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.
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,
travelers
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travellers
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 spending time on
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island
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the island
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 showed increasing annual figures, and after 2012, those
people
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 went up to
2millions
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2 million
 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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