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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Majority
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 of
people
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 agree that
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is the most accurate source of
news
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,
while
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part
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parts
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 of
societies
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society
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 opine that there
are
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many
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news
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 offered by other
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medias
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media
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. In
this
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newspaper
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newspapers
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is
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are
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 best for
its
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their
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 credibility, other media
is
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are
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 popular for
its
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their
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 ease of access and affordability. Society
choose
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 because of the credibility offered by publishers.
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Newspaper
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The newspaper
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 has
been existed
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 for centuries, so it has
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apply
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great public
trusts
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trust
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. The publishers that sell
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 have been registered in formal
institution
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institutions
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 managed by
government
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the government
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.
Moreover
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, the article within a
newspaper
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 has been
went
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going
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 through a long process
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 as double-checking and expert review. These practices have been applied for decades
on
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to
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 famous
publisher
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publishers
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 in Indonesia
such
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 as Jawa Pos, and Tempo. Other
medias
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such
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 as digital
news
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is
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 preferred
for
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by
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 some
people
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 because
it
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they
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 can be easily accessed and free.
People
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 only need to be connected to the Internet and they can read a whole article. The information
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also
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is also
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 written by various
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medias
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media
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 and some of them are available in Blog.
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, there has been an increasing case of fake
news
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in
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on
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 the Internet because anybody could write and publish
a
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news
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news
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.
Hence
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, to avoid believing a hoax,
people
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 must
be independently check
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independently check
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 the information. In conclusion,
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news
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the news
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 is
a factual information
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factual information
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 and we should put credibility as the number one priority. Currently,
this
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 is mainly served by newspapers, not the digital
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medias
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media
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 that contain many fake
news
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.

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task achievement
The essay presents balanced arguments but could benefit from a clearer introduction to the topic in the opening paragraph. Consider introducing the topic more explicitly before delving into the viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader. The paragraphs discuss good points but sometimes lack a clear, introductory sentence that sets the context for the discussion.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, use more transition words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly. This helps in guiding the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
The essay presents logical arguments supporting both sides of the debate.
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There are specific and relevant examples, such as mentioning Jawa Pos and Tempo, which add depth to the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trusted source
  • credibility
  • in-depth analysis
  • detailed coverage
  • background information
  • expert opinions
  • viewpoints
  • tangible
  • offline alternative
  • instant access
  • real-time updates
  • diverse formats
  • interactivity
  • user interaction
  • community engagement
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