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Every country in the world has its own road rules, but many drivers don’t obey them. What do you think are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#country #world #road #rules #drivers #don’t
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urbanisation
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the urbanisation
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 era,every
regions
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region
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 should have their own regulations
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,some individuals are not following
it
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them
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 properly.For
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,authorities should
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take
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 strict action against
wrongdoer
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wrongdoers
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.In
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esaay
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essay
,I will discuss both
causes
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the causes
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 and the solutions
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,individuals do not have a proper education about the traffic
rules
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 as s result it would be
harmed
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 to others.
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,kids are driving vehicles even
they
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though they
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 don't meet the standard age value of driving and it would
be proved
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prove
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 hazardous for them and
surroundings
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their surroundings
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.
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,in
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hussle
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hassle
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bussle
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bustle
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 life,no one
have
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 time to stop at traffic
signles
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signs
 and choose
persistant
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persistent
drive
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driving
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 which
are
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hindered
opposite
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 vehicles
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proliferate
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proliferates
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 chances of accidents. To solve
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issues
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issue
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,
Government
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the Government
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 should
implify
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implement
 strict
rules
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 and make sure that it should be followed by everyone.They must have strict
lows
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laws
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 against rule breakers like,they should fined a hefty amount of money.
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,one can be
frighten
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frightened
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 to pay huge amounts and obligated to
follw
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follow
rules
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.
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,it may be helpful for
government
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a government
the government
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 that if someone
have
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broke
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broken
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 the
rules
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,their license should be
suspected
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suspended
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 for a longer period of time.
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this
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, I have dropped
down
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apply
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my pen to say that government and society should
be contributed
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contribute
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 equally as a part of
nation
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the nation
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.Everyone follows
rules
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 which are given by authority
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 they will be punishable.
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