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nowadays mass media hides the truth and misguides the people. what are the resons behind it and how is it affecting the society at large?

Informational
media
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 nowadays holds a paramount effect in influencing common people.
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 it is meant to spread awareness and
information
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 at a mass level, it can often be misleading.
This
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 act may be attributed to
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media
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the media
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 being biased and under the influence of stakeholders,
as well as
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to withhold
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 key
information
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 that may put national security at stake.
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, people have started to disbelieve the
news
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 source and at times, the authenticity of genuine
information
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 has
also
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 been questioned by them. To start with, whether the country holds a democratic government or a hierarchical one,
news
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 channels have been noticed to be under pressure in one way or the other and are mostly bound to show one side of the picture only,
that
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which
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 might work in the best interest of their funders.
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, a corrupt politician might be portrayed as the ideal candidate to rule the country,
whereas
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 every act of a rightly deserving leader could be presented as offending and against the best interest of the nation. Having said that, not revealing the facts to the masses could be to hide the controversial issues that might not be in the best interest of the state and may lead to a countrywide panic.
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, if a national or a foreign terrorist group is threatening to disrupt the peace of the country, it would be preferable to hold back
this
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news
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 until appropriate measures have been taken to ensure public safety. Some visible effects of the above misguidance by mass
media
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 have been observed among people at the national level and those residing overseas. The vulnerable public has started to deny every
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information
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piece of information
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 and has lost faith in mainstream
media
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.
This
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 can have detrimental effects as, at times, not all
that is
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 said on these channels is to be denied. Not believing in factual broadcasts can become a big hurdle in achieving
a
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collective national goals. In view of the above, we can conclude that
twisting
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the twisting
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 of important facts by
media
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, for personal or national reasons, can have multiple effects at a mass level.
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, I believe that it may be both right and wrong to cover the truth
by
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in
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 the
media
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 if done for a better cause.
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, avoiding a biased approach towards
news
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 delivery will encourage
public
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the public
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 to start having faith in
the
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credible
information
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.

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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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relevant specific examples
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clear comprehensive ideas
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introduction conclusion present
The conclusion summarizes the main points well and offers a balanced view, acknowledging both the potential positives and negatives of media actions.
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