In the 20th century, contact between many different parts of the world developed rapidly through telecommunication and air travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Although
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improvement
were there in the 20th Fix the agreement mistake
improvements
century
internationally Use synonyms
due to
the introduction of Linking Words
variety
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a variety
aeroplanes
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of aeroplanes
as well as
new and fast processor cellphones, Linking Words
on the other hand
, Linking Words
this
can cause death of people especially Linking Words
due to
the disappearing and emergency landing of the flights.Linking Words
Therefore
, I do believe that Linking Words
benefits
of Correct article usage
the benefits
this
may Linking Words
outnumbered
the drawbacks.
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outnumber
Initially
, globally in the 20th Linking Words
century
, humans started to Use synonyms
use
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new
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the new
a new
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models
model
of mobile phones with Fix the agreement mistake
models
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apply
a
good quality Correct article usage
apply
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apply
of
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apply
network
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networks
such
as 4gs and 5gs.Linking Words
This
helped Linking Words
the
society in communication Correct article usage
apply
system
since long ago were Fix the agreement mistake
systems
Use synonyms
use
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used
3gs
Correct your spelling
3GS
network
which were of lower quality and Fix the agreement mistake
networks
also
landlines.A very good example to illustrate that could be my native country Zimbabwe, in my country, the population in the Linking Words
last
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century
they Use synonyms
were
usually Unnecessary verb
apply
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use
landlines to contact each other, Wrong verb form
used
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this
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and this
were
causing Change the verb form
was
also
some problems of miscommunication because sometimes thieves Linking Words
stolen
the wires and telephone poles for home Wrong verb form
stole
use
.Use synonyms
Hence
, the state ended with poor telecommunication but after a Linking Words
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while
they created wireless Add a comma
while,
landcalls
which are now in Correct your spelling
land calls
and calls
use
and Use synonyms
then
, Linking Words
this
can clearly Linking Words
shows
the Change the verb form
show
positivety
and quick development through mobiles.
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positivity
positive
Moreover
, many countries bought many Linking Words
and
different types of airlines to develop the system of travelling.Correct word choice
apply
Additionally
, Linking Words
this
was a good idea but it Linking Words
also
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causes
high flight accidents which resulted in Wrong verb form
caused
death
of the people.To illustrate, countries like Kenya and Add an article
the death
Uganga
bought some planes to improve the Correct your spelling
Uganda
rolacting
of humans but Correct your spelling
relocating
collecting
this
can Linking Words
causing
crushes and emergency landing of flights in that region.Currently, the Prime of Uganda and 7 others died in a Wrong verb form
cause
crush
of Correct your spelling
crash
an
helicopter, Change the article
a
thus
, Linking Words
it is clear that
flights can kill our national heroes.
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To conclude
, in the 20th Linking Words
century
, Use synonyms
a
rapid development from more and more parts of the world Correct article usage
apply
were
there but it Correct subject-verb agreement
was
also
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cause
the death of human lives, Wrong verb form
caused
however
, I agree that the advantages of Linking Words
this
outweigh the disadvantages.Linking Words
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