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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses
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The bar graph displays the figure of males and females attending four sorts of
courses
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 during
night
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the night
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 at the Education of
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adults center
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Adults Center
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 in 2009. The pie chart provides data about the range of ages of
adults
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen in the bar chart that the
number
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 of
women
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 attending
courses
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 was higher than that of men. The language
course
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 was the highest
course
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attending
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attended
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 by
women
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,
while
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 the
sclpture
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sculpture
 was the lowest .
On the other hand
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, the majority of
people
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 who registered for
courses
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 were 50 years old,
whereas
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, the least aged were under 20 years old. For more details, the
number
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 of females who registered
the
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for the
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 language
course
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 was 40,
while
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 only 20 were males.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of men was higher than that of
women
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 in the sculpture
course
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, at 10
people
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.
Furthermore
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, panting was the second
course
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 in the
number
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 of
adults
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, which was 30 for
women
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 and 25 for men. Moving to the pie chart, the percentage of
people
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 attending these
courses
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 who were over 50 years old was the highest, at 42%.
In addition
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, more than a fifth of
people
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 were between 40 to 49. In
contast
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contrast
,
adults
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 under 20
was
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were
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 the lowest
mat
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at
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 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, adults, number, women, course, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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