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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following bar chart and table illustrate the financial assistance obtained by four nations and the allocation of funds in 1974 and 2014.
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, the data indicates a shift in monetary support from the finance sector to the medicine sphere over the 40-year period.
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, all four countries experienced a reduction in the amount of financial
aid
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 received in 2014 compared to 1974, with China seeing the most significant decrease. In 1974, the funding for catering was about 70
million
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, which fell to
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15
million
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 in 2014. Support for medicine
droped
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dropped
 from 80
million
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 in 1974 to 60
million
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 in 2014.
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, financial support for finance saw a gradual downfall, from 70
million
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 in 1974 to 65
million
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 in 2014. China received 62
million
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 in
aid
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 in 1974, which dropped dramatically to 6
million
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 in 2014. Indonesia's
aid
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 went down from 55
million
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 in 1974 to 30
million
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 in 2014. Thailand’s
aid
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reduced
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 from 48
million
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 in 1974 to 18
million
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 in 2014. South Africa received 65
million
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 in 1974, decreasing to 42
million
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 in 2014.
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