The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.
The line graph shows
temperature
and the bar
chart revenue
from bathing suit sales
in New York City. Both are from the first six months in 2012.,temperature
is measured in Fahrenheit and sales
measured
in US$.
Add a missing verb
are measured
Overall
, we can see that monthly temperature
increased significantly and bathing suit sales
peaked in April.
As . More people buy swimsuits in winter and spring to prepare for summer we can see from January to March the revenue
had increased in steady
pattern ,$100.000, $150.000 and $200.000 respectively, at the same time the average temperatures, had fluctuated a bit, in January the Add an article
a steady
temperature
was approximately 32 degrees
while
in February 30 degrees
and March almost 40 degrees
.
April is when most of the money is made from selling swimsuits ,and as whether
gets too hot in May Correct your spelling
weather
sales
drop dramatically to almost less than third
of Correct article usage
a third
April
Change noun form
April's
revenue
and decrease even more in June.
In April the revenue
bar
was just under $300.000, in May the bar
was just one third
of the previous month but three times more than Add a hyphen
one-third
June
Correct article usage
the June
bar
. Whereas
, the temperature
line had
kept Unnecessary verb
apply
to
Change preposition
apply
increasing
from February to June Change the form of the verb
increase
where
it was recorded Correct word choice
when
more
or less 65 Fahrenheit Change preposition
at more
degrees
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