The graph shows the consumption of Fast Food among Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

The graph shows the consumption of Fast Food among Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.
The graph illustrates the amount of 3 different types of fast food namely,
pizza
,
hamburgers
, and
chips
and
fish
, used by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Overall
, the consumption of
fish
and
chips
experienced a wide fluctuation before marking a significant decline. Meanwhile,
pizza
and
hamburgers
increased dramatically from 1975 to 1995. For the first 10
year
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, the amount of the eaten
fish
and
chips
started
with
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100
items
,
then
went down and up to fluctuate between 100
items
and approximately 82
items
till 1985. For
pizza
and
hamburgers
, they began with
low
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number of
items
of barely 8, and 9 respectively in 1975 followed by a sharp rise till hitting a tipping point in 1985 and 1995.
However
, the consumption of
fish
and
chips
experienced a minimal fall from 95
items
to 39
items
in the
last
15 years. Unlike
pizza
consumption
stopped
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to increase to face stability, from 1995 to 2000, of scarlessly 82
items
.
On the other hand
, teenagers used more
hamburgers
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items
ranged
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between 85 to
hit
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a very high amount of 100
items
in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, hamburgers, chips, fish, items with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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