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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words
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The two maps illustrate the developments that
accured
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accrued
occurred
 at the school from 1985 and its current form .
Overall
 ,
it is clear that
 the dimension of the road has changed its shape .
Moreover
 , There has been an expansion in
class rooms
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,
while
also
 adding a green space in the centre .
This
 development has made it
accessable
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accessible
 for more students to attend the school . In 1985 , the Southern area of the school was a playing field
that
is
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 opposite
to
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the car park and the office ,
while
 the classrooms and the library
where
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 backed up by the playing field . currently , the pool and fitness centre overtook the fields which declined the size of it .
However
 , the entrance , exit , and
the
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office
has
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have
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 remained
on
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its
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their
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 original place. The library was
demonished
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demolished
admonished
 in order to make up space for the
class room
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classroom
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 and the learning resources centre , which includes a computer room .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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