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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in four countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in four countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
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the bar chart depicts the proportion of the whole citizens in
India
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,
China
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, the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 over the 52-year timescale spanning from 1950 to 2002.
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, the proportion of total people in
India
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 exhibits an upward trend,
while
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 that of
China
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, the
USA
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, and
Japan
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 experiences consistently opposite patterns.
Additionally
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,
India
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 will be expected to become the most popular nation in its population throughout the surveyed period. From the outset of 1950, the percentage of total citizens in
China
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 was
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, accounting for 23 %, which was 8% higher than that of
India
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. 102 years later, it is expected that the figure for the total population in
China
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 will drop quickly to 15%,
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 the figure for
India
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 is predicted to increase sharply to 19% by the end of the surveyed period.
On the other hand
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, a negligible 3% of people came from
Japan
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, hitting the lowest point in 1950, compared to 7% of the
USA
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. After which, the data of
Japan
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 is estimated to fall slowly about 2% by 2050,
while
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 there was a slight decrease to 5% in the level of the
USA
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 in 2002
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 before being anticipated to be unchanged by the end of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, usa, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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