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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social prblems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statements?

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There is no doubt that these days many people suffer from migration and learning the
language
 of the country
their
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 living in ,
also
 they find difficulties in the
work place
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workplace
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 where they should speak the
language
 of the area they're immigrated to. In terms of problems in communication,
language
 is the key
of
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to
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 communicating, gaining job opportunities and
educations
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,
However
, it is not simple to learn a a completely different
language
 than yours, the main reason given to support
this
 claim is that some countries that speak English as the first
language
 require non-English speakers to do a
language
 exam to know his level of understanding.
Furthermore
, the other issue is in practical work,
this
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 includes studying and getting a job, it all contains the
language
 of the country
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task achievement
Your introduction introduces the topic, but it lacks a clear thesis statement that outlines your position on the issue. Consider adding a more specific statement of your stance.
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Ensure that each main idea is fully developed and supported with relevant examples and explanations. This will help to provide a more comprehensive response to the task.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a clear logical structure by using cohesive devices and transitions between paragraphs to guide the reader. For example, starting with phrases like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'In conclusion' can help to organize your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points and reiterates your position. This will help to provide a sense of closure to your essay.
general
Be careful with grammatical errors and sentence structure. Read your essay aloud or have someone else review it to identify areas that may need improvement.
task achievement
You have addressed both social and practical problems related to living in a country with a foreign language.
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You have identified specific issues, such as difficulties in communication and job opportunities, which are relevant to the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • miscommunications
  • social isolation
  • underemployment
  • language barrier
  • cultural misunderstandings
  • practical issues
  • everyday situations
  • fluency
  • parent-teacher meetings
  • accessing services
  • cultural faux pas
  • frustrations
  • legal aid
  • serious repercussions
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