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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cars #transport #city #centres #bicycles
Mowdays
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On days
,
due to
 traffic it is suggested to prohibit public transportation in the cities replacement with bikes. I completely
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agree
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 with
this
 statement because it will be good for
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environment
as well as
 for
local
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the local
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 public. The primary reason is
green house
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greenhouse
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gas negatively
impact
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upon
environment
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the environment
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 .To illustrate that, numerous vehicles spread more gas like
,
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carbon .
Moreover
 it causes crowded in street
consequntly
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consequently
, it
make
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 accidents among individuals. Especially, busses and big motors.
Furtheromre
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Furthermore
,
consumption
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vehicles
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 widely,
it
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is considered a horrible aside
due to
 some people
might
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late
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 for their work.
Also
,it is
lost
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 their time just for waiting
hence
 , they feel anxiety and stress.
The another
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benefit of
prohibit
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prohibiting
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vehicle
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is
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grammar
Work on improving grammar and spelling. For example, 'nowdays' should be 'nowadays,' and 'consequntly' should be 'consequently.'
development
Develop each idea more fully with specific details and examples. This will make your arguments clearer and more compelling.
structure
End your essay with a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.
balance
Ensure that you address both sides of the argument to provide a more balanced view. This will make your essay more comprehensive and persuasive.
opinion
The essay addresses the topic and provides a clear opinion, which is an essential aspect of the task response.
approach
The intention to discuss specific reasons like environmental impact and public stress shows a good approach to developing the argument.
relevant points
You have identified valid points such as greenhouse gas emissions and traffic congestion, which are relevant to the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • air pollution
  • sustainable
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  • traffic
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  • population
  • investment
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