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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: say where you are going, describe your home explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _________,

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Dear John, I hope that you're doing great, I'm writing
this
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 message to let you know that I'm planning to take a summer holiday soon. I decided to visit Italy and I will meet my sister who lives in Rome, and maybe I will be able to come
across
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to
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 other countries for one month. My
flaying
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flying
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 tickets
is
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are
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 on the 5th of June. I'm really too excited
to
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about
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this
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 summer. I live in Hawaii Street near
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the public hospital, door number 87. You know that my home consists of 2 floors
,
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 and a backyard. To be honest I feel a little bit worried about some important things that need to take care of when I start my vacation. So I would be really
greatful
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grateful
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look
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 after my mom's garden and
watering
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 the plants each Friday.
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 to that, please watch out
our
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 dog Mana
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, she is very friendly I think you would like her. If you need any details please send me , thank you for your help and see you soon Nouf, Best wishes,

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coherence cohesion
Try to clearly separate each point into its own paragraph. This will help the reader follow your message more easily.
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Consider adding more details about your travel plans and any specific instructions for your friend related to the house. This will make your letter more comprehensive.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for a message to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens with a proper greeting and closes with a suitable sign-off, making it cohesive.
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