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Last weekend, your cousin celebrated her 50th birthday, but you could not attend and forgot to cancel. Write a letter to your cousin. In your letter: Apologize for missing the birthday celebration Explain why you missed it and why you had not let her know Describe how you will make it up to her

#weekend #cousin #birthday #celebration
Dear
sofia
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, How are you? I am writing
this
 letter to apologize
you
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to you
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 for my absence
at
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from
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 your birthday party. I got your birthday invitation
on
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last
 month. Unfortunately, there were lots of business meetings
came
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that came
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 up
during
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last
 weekend. As
,
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 a new cosmetic product
were
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 launched by our company. For
this
, I was really busy
to make
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making
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 a wonderful presentation to attract
new
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business man
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businessman
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 to make new
paternahips
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paternalists
.
Moreover
, making a presentation made me so busy that
i
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I
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 forgot to inform you
about
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that
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 I can not show up on your birthday.
However
, am coming next week to meet you to give you a big surprise which may help you to apologize
me
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to me
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. I hope you understand my situation. Best wishes, Prabhjit
kaur
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task achievement
Be more specific about the surprise gift or gesture in order to make the apology feel heartfelt and personal.
coherence cohesion
Proofread the letter for small grammatical errors and vocabulary issues, such as 'I' instead of 'i,' and 'apologize you' instead of 'apologize to you.'
task achievement
The letter includes a clear apology and explanation for missing the birthday, which helps in task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Usage of paragraphs to separate different points aids in coherence and single idea per paragraph.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, enhancing the tone of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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