the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now
The two maps illustrate the
developements
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developments
made to a local
library
from 20 years and what it represents today.
Overall
, the
library
developed from only an educational space to a more entertaining area with an events area, a cafe, and
self services
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machines.
tweenty
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twenty
years ago, the
library
had tables and chairs in the middle just
infront
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in front
of the entrance.Today these have been removed, and it is now an open space. The CDs, videos,
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and an
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an
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computer
room
on the top left
was
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renovated and expanded into a
story telling
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events area, with sofas and children's fiction books. To the left of the
room
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the
childrens
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room
was replaced with a lecture
room
.
However
, the middle section towards the east of the
library
is
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where the
adults
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non-fiction books
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, is now replaced with fiction books and the addition of
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machines
have
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been installed. there has
also
been a relocation of the information desk to the same areas
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and was redesigned into a cafe towards the right side of the entrance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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