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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter

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Dear Mr. Phillip, My name is Nisa and I rented one of your accommodations
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 8 White Lily Street, Perth, Western Australia. I am writing to complain about some furniture condition in our place.
Firstly
, my family has been noticing that the toilet door is a bit hard to close. I believe that there is something underneath it that made it heavy and resulted in the difficulties of opening & closing the door.
Secondly
, the lights in the living room have been glitching non-stop for the past 2 weeks, I think it’s best for your team to check it and see if it needs to be changed.
Lastly
, our dining table has a stain. I tried to clean it but
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 could not because the stain
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 already dry. Can you please help me to fix these problems as we are not satisfied with
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 place
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 Your quick reply will be appreciated. Thank you! Kind regards, Nisa
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task achievement
Try to provide a little more detail about the impact of the issues on your day-to-day living. For example, how the faulty toilet door or glitching lights are affecting your family.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing the letter with clearer paragraphs by grouping related issues together. This will enhance the logical flow of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid using symbols (&) in formal writing. Instead, use the word 'and'. Ensure you consistently capitalize the pronoun 'I'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and courteous, which is suitable for formal communication with a landlord.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are well executed, making the letter formally correct.
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