More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

Nowadays, the
amount
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of
cars
increase
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has increased
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among
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with
growing
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the growing
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of
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human population. In fact,
people
that
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who
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alive
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live
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in
city
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the city
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especially already over-reliance on
own
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their own
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cars
. The gist cause is
giving
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having
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bad
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a bad
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impact
for
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on
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the environment.
Then
, increasing the payment of
tax
for private
car
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cars
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is one of the possible
solution
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solutions
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. First of all, almost
people
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all people
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that
alive
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live
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in the city already
use
private
cars
. There are
reason
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reasons
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why
people
using
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use
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private
cars
like it makes
their
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them
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comfortable,
save
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saves
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more time and
protect
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protects
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for
the
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apply
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pollution
.
For example
,
people
use
private
cars
when they go to work, school,
holiday
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holidays
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and other activities.
Althought
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Although
, the destination is near they still
use
private
cars
. Unfortunately, that can be
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a problems
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problems
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problem
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especially
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, especially
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for the environment.
For instance
, the fuel
is
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apply
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produced by private
cars
,
it
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apply
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can
be increasing
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increase
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amount
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the amount
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of
pollution
such
as air
pollution
and increasing of carbon-monoxide.
The
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pollution
is very dangerous
due to
this
is the fact that will create some
illness
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illnesses
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.
Besides
that
is
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apply
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the
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a
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possible solution
as
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is
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increasing the payment of
tax
private
cars
. The government should be making
policy
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policies
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and
rule
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rules
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about that.
For example
, every
people
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person
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that
have
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has
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a private car
have
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has
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to pay
for
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apply
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tax
every 3 months. So, it makes the
people
can search
other
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for other
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options like using public
transportion
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transportation
.
Then
, the number of private
cars
can decrease slightly every year.
Moreover
, the quality of
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the environtment
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environtment
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environment
is better than before. In summary, there is one big
problems
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problem
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when
the
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apply
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people
over-reliance
use
private
cars
as
giving
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having
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bad impact
for
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on
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the environtment
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environtment
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environment
environments
such
as increasing
pollution
.
Then
, the solution is
increased
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to increase
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for payment
tax
by
government
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the government
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.
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