More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.
Nowadays, the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
cars
increase
Wrong verb form
has increased
among
with Change preposition
apply
growing
Correct article usage
the growing
of
human population. In fact, Change preposition
apply
people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
alive
in Correct your spelling
live
city
especially already over-reliance on Add an article
the city
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
cars
. The gist cause is giving
Verb problem
having
bad
impact Correct article usage
a bad
for
the environment. Change preposition
on
Then
, increasing the payment of tax
for private car
is one of the possible Fix the agreement mistake
cars
solution
.
First of all, almost Change to a plural noun
solutions
people
that Correct determiner usage
all people
alive
in the city already Correct your spelling
live
use
private cars
. There are reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
people
using
private Wrong verb form
use
cars
like it makes their
comfortable, Correct pronoun usage
them
save
more time and Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
protect
for Correct subject-verb agreement
protects
the
Correct article usage
apply
pollution
. For example
, people
use
private cars
when they go to work, school, holiday
and other activities. Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
Althought
, the destination is near they still Correct your spelling
Although
use
private cars
. Unfortunately, that can be Correct article usage
a problems
problems
Fix the agreement mistake
problem
especially
for the environment. Add the comma(s)
, especially
For instance
, the fuel is
produced by private Unnecessary verb
apply
cars
, it
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
be increasing
Wrong verb form
increase
amount
of Correct article usage
the amount
pollution
such
as air pollution
and increasing of carbon-monoxide. The
Correct article usage
Pollution
pollution
is very dangerous due to
this
is the fact that will create some illness
.
Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
Besides
that
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
possible solution Correct article usage
a
as
increasing the payment of Correct your spelling
is
tax
private cars
. The government should be making policy
and Fix the agreement mistake
policies
rule
about that. Fix the agreement mistake
rules
For example
, every people
that Fix the agreement mistake
person
have
a private car Correct subject-verb agreement
has
have
to pay Correct subject-verb agreement
has
for
Change preposition
apply
tax
every 3 months. So, it makes the people
can search other
options like using public Change preposition
for other
transportion
. Correct your spelling
transportation
Then
, the number of private cars
can decrease slightly every year. Moreover
, the quality of Correct article usage
the environtment
environtment
is better than before.
In summary, there is one big Correct your spelling
environment
problems
when Change to a singular noun
problem
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
over-reliance use
private cars
as giving
bad impact Verb problem
having
for
Change preposition
on
Correct article usage
the environtment
environtment
Correct your spelling
environment
environments
such
as increasing pollution
. Then
, the solution is increased
for payment Change the verb form
to increase
tax
by government
.Add an article
the government
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