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The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the difference
in
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between
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 the countryside of
Meadowside
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 and the urban
area
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 of
Fonton
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 between 1962 and now.
Overall
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,
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two
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the two
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 locations were not connected,
which
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and
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 the
area
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 of
Fonton
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 was bigger than the
Meadowside
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village
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, in 1962,
while
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 they combined in the same land today. In 1962,
two
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 locations mentioned the above information, which did not have a relationship and the
Meadowside
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Village
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 located on the left of the town. In 1985, the
area
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 of
Meadowside
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village
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 was
incresed
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increased
 by around double. There
also
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had
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built more three facilities,
such
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 as a housing estate, a leisure
center
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centre
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 and a super-store. Compared with the
last
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 map,
two
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 locations connected by a road, that was convenient for
two
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area
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 residents. Nowadays, the most improvement is combined by the
Meadowside
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 and
Fonton
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 so that the
Meadowside
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Village
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 is called
Meadowside
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 Suburb. Three buildings, a hotel, a station and a business park,
build
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are built
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 between
two
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 areas.
Furthermore
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, the railway
also
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 builds from the station to the right of
Fonton
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. In general, the change of places is
difference
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different
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 in 1962 and now.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, area, fonton, two, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural area
  • expansion
  • infrastructure
  • commercial development
  • housing development
  • population growth
  • key landmarks
  • transformation
  • local community
  • economy
  • environmental impact
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