Some people say the feeling of competition should be encouraged in children while others say they should be taught to become cooperative. What is your opinion?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

277 words

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Some people say the feeling of competition should be encouraged in children while others say they should be taught to become cooperative. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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These days more and more people spend their free time doing dangerous activities. Why is this happening? Are there more positive or negative effects to this trend?