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The graphs illustrate the sales of cars and the cases of polio in the year 1960 to 2010

The graphs illustrate the sales of cars and the cases of polio in the year 1960 to 2010
The graphs illustrate the sales of cars and the cases of polio in the year 1960 to 2010.
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, the first graph decreased constantly and the second graph saw a slight fall. First of all, the sales of cars stood at 105 in 1960. After two decades, 1980 saw a slight fall
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 85. Following that, there was a decrease
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 20 (from 85 to 65).
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, in 1990, the sales of cars went down to 45. After that, there was a dramatic decline to 25. Finishing the period at 5 in 2010. Based on the second graph, the cases of polio level of 105 in 1960, followed by 85 in 1970. After that, there was no change at 85 in 1980.
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, the cases of polio fell by 20 (from 85 to 65). Next, 1990 and 2000 saw to remain steady at 65. Finishing the period at 45 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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