The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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The line graph compares the changes
of
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in
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eaten fast food by Australian adolescents between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
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, all figures experienced different trends.
While
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the consumption of pizza and hamburgers
were
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was
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increasing quickly, the line of eating fish and chips decreased rapidly. In 1975, the starting point of fish and chips was a hundred times. But it fell dramatically to around eighty occurrences. In 1995, it was pointed to about ninety incidents.
Then
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till two
thousand
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it declined slowly to forty instances. The starting point of eating hamburgers was about ten times in 1975.
Then
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, until 1985 it increased rapidly to around 90 incidents. In two thousand, it
got
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reached
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the
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its
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highest point with
hundred
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a hundred
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events. From 1975 until 1995 the number of eating pizza increased quickly to around
eighty five
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eighty-five
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times from about five events. It got no change till two thousand.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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