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The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The bar graph gives information about
China
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's
ownership
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 of
vehicles
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 from 1987 to 1999.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 in
China
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 grew significantly in a span of 12
years
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. In 1987, the Chinese population owned
vehicles
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 to around 300 per 10 thousand
of
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people
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this
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 figure continued to grow to a high of almost 800 in 1991. Interestingly, the
number
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 of
people
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 buying cars did not increase in
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years
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the years
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 1992-1994, but
China
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has seen
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saw
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 an exponential growth
of
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in
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 its vehicle
ownership
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 in 1995 hitting a high of approximately 2,000
every
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for every
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 10 thousand
people
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. Over the next 3
years
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, the Chinese
people
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 owned a staggering
number
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 of 3,000 doubling the
number
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 in the previous
years
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. In 1999, the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 owned in
China
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 rose exponentially making it the year with the highest quantity of cars owned standing at about 4,100 per ten thousand
people
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.
To conclude
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,
China
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 had the lowest
number
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 of car
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ownership
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owners
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 in
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years
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the years
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 1987 to 1994, but in mid
1990s
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mid-1990s
 its vehicle
ownership
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 continued to rise
in
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threefold.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, ownership, vehicles, number, years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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