Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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that in recent times
education
levels have decreased, mainly in two areas,
literacy
and
numeracy
. Excessive use of social
media
and online
education
system
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systems
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are two main causes behind
fall
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the fall
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of
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in
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educations level
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education levels
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,
although
, switching to physical
classes
and strict regulation by
government
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the government
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required
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are required
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to tackle these issues. Starting with
causes
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the causes
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behind declination of
education
level, nowadays,
youngsters
are currently focusing more
into
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on
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imagination, like, they are spending more energy
into
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on
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making
instagram
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reels and online
youtube
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YouTube
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videos to earn money rather
then
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than
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focusing more on improving
numeracy
and
literacy
skills.
This
is because these
youngsters
are inspired by other
people
's wealth,
people
who have earned money from social
media
apps
.
For example
, after
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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,
youngsters
are more
focusing
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into
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on
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a
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apply
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social
media
apps
to earn money rather
focusing
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than focusing
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on learning new skills. Another
cause
is,
children
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that children
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are having trouble
in
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focusing
in
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on
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their online teaching.
This
is because most schools now focusing more on online
education
teaching,
this
system
can
cause
them into a lower concentration level and use of other
media
apps
while
attending online lectures.
This
ultimately leads to
decline
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a decline
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in
education
levels. To tackle
this
issues
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issue
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,
government
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the government
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must
have to
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enter into
this
situation and
needs to
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introduce new strict regulations for social
media
apps
to prevent using social
media
apps
to
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by
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certain age
group
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groups
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of
people
.
This
will
helps
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help
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certain age group
people
to focus more on improving
numeracy
and
literacy
skills.
Secondly
, starting physical
classes
at school rather
then
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than
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promoting online lectures, many
survey
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surveys
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has proved that online
classes
are
main
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the main
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cause
of the
declination
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decline
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of
education
.
For example
, in Gujarat, after "Covid-19" many schools adopted
online
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an online
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education
system
, but after facing numerous
low scoring
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results,
government
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the government
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has recently decided to initiate physical
classes
at schools.
To conclude
, excessive use of social
media
amongst
youngsters
and
online
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the online
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education
system
are
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is
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main
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the main
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cause
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causes
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behind
decline
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the decline
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in
numeracy
and
literacy
,
although
,
by
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apply
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introducing physical
classes
and
government
interpretation can help to tackle these issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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