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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex school have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Debate between
single
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sex
schools
 and co-educational
schools
 has been ongoing for years. Some
of
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parents
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the parents
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 consider that
single -
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sex
school's
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 pupils
has
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 lasting disadvantages in their lives.
This
 essay supports
this
 proposal. Certainly, the pupils in
single
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sex
school
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schools
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 often face difficulties interacting with
opposite
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the opposite
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sex
.
Student
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Students
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 in
single
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sex
school
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schools
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 find it more challenging to form
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friendship
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friendships
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 and professional
relationship
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relationships
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 with
opposite
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the opposite
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sex
, which can be
significant
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 drawback
on
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the
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personal and business settings later in life. Another significant drawback is the reduced preparation for the real world.Most professional and social environments are co-educational, requiring
collabration
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collaboration
 and communication between genders.
Students
 from
single
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single-sex
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sex
school
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schools
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 might struggle to adapt to
mixed genders
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mixed-gender
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 environments, leading to difficulties in both higher education and
workplace
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the workplace
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. Co-educational
schools
,
however
, mirror
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diversity of
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real world
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real-world
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 providing
students
 with
skills
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 and experience necessary to succeed in a variety of settings. In my view, the segregation of
students
 by
gender
 in single-
sex
schools
 can lead to a lack of empathy and understanding
for
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gender
-specific issues and challenges.
This
 segregation can foster discriminatory attitudes and unrealistic expectations about
gender
behavior
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. Co-educational
schools
,
by contrast
, provide opportunities for
students
 to develop empathy and understanding through regular interaction with the opposite
sex
.
This
 inclusive environment can help reduce
gender
 discrimination and promote equality. In conclusion,
while
 single-
sex
schools
 might offer some benefits, the disadvantages related to social interaction, real-world preparation, and the potential for fostering
gender
 stereotypes are significant. Co-educational
schools
 provide a more balanced and realistic preparation for life, equipping
students
 with the necessary skills and experiences to succeed in diverse settings.
Therefore
, the disadvantages of single-
sex
 schooling outweigh the advantages, making co-educational schooling the more beneficial option for children's
overall
 development and future success.
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