You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter. -describe the party and how it went -explain why you were pleased with the hotel service. -suggest some improvements that the hotel could make
Dear sir,
My team held a party at your hotel
last
week Friday and I must confess that it was nothing short of fantastic. The ambience and the interior decorations were fascinating, hence
, making it a lovely place to take group photographs.
Firstly
, the location of your hotel being in the middle of a bubbling city is just perfect. Also
, the rooftop lounge where the event was held gave the perfect view that anybody could ask for. Additionally
, I cannot only commend the warm gesture of your staff for their great coordination but also
the entire management at large for their level of professionalism within the facility.
However
, despite all these commendations, it would be more appealing if the kitchen staff and chefs could work on the meals served. The meals weren't totally bad but many of the dishes were spicy with stale taste. I would advise you to work on the recipe and encourage the cooks to prepare every meal afresh. If these are worked on, I doubt if anybody would have any negative reviews about your hotel.
I hope you will consider my suggestions.
Yours faithfully,
Moses.Submitted by callmosomitoyin on
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task achievement
While your response is complete, including a bit more detail about the party, such as the number of attendees or specific highlights, could strengthen your letter.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider adding transitional words or phrases between sections to guide the reader smoothly through your points.
task achievement
Great job on addressing all parts of the task, including both praise and suggestions for improvement.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing were appropriate and polite, fitting well with the formal tone of the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite