The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent lexical in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming only language to be spoken globally. Advantages and disadvantages?

Tourism is developing which gives
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contributions to
English
as the only predominant
language
worldwide, resulting
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English
as the only
language
used all over the world. There are some benefits and drawbacks to
this
application which will be discussed
further
in the upcoming paragraphs.
English
as the Lingua Franca in tourism means that people, both tourists and the hosts who are not native
English
have to be able to communicate using the
language
. One advantage of having a
language
which is standard to use all over the world is that both sides will have the same
language
to use and that
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in translation will not occur. Another plus point is the regions which have already used
English
as their second
language
will be the major options for most people to visit
due to
the
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there will be drawbacks to
this
as whenever the locals keep talking in
English
, the local
language
will perish slowly but surely as the
language
is only spoken once in a blue moon.
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can be prevented if the government and the natives cooperate by putting the
language
in the curriculum, using it in street signs or in shows presented for the visitors.
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conclusion, countries that use
English
will attract more visitors to the area as it makes it easy for visitors to communicate and
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confusion
can be hindered. The bad side is that the local
language
will die.
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this
can be stopped if the regional
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  • Lexical
  • Global language
  • Improved communication
  • Understanding
  • Economic benefits
  • Educational opportunities
  • Information and knowledge
  • Global business
  • Professional opportunities
  • Cultural diversity
  • Linguistic heritage
  • Linguistic inequality
  • Language and power imbalance
  • Limited access to information
  • Threat to minority languages
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