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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent lexical in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming only language to be spoken globally. Advantages and disadvantages?

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Tourism is developing which gives
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 contributions to
English
 as the only predominant
language
 worldwide, resulting
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English
 as the only
language
 used all over the world. There are some benefits and drawbacks to
this
 application which will be discussed
further
 in the upcoming paragraphs.
English
 as the Lingua Franca in tourism means that people, both tourists and the hosts who are not native
English
 have to be able to communicate using the
language
. One advantage of having a
language
 which is standard to use all over the world is that both sides will have the same
language
 to use and that
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 in translation will not occur. Another plus point is the regions which have already used
English
 as their second
language
 will be the major options for most people to visit
due to
 the
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ease
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 there will be drawbacks to
this
 as whenever the locals keep talking in
English
, the local
language
 will perish slowly but surely as the
language
 is only spoken once in a blue moon.
Nevertheless
,
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 can be prevented if the government and the natives cooperate by putting the
language
 in the curriculum, using it in street signs or in shows presented for the visitors.
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conclusion, countries that use
English
 will attract more visitors to the area as it makes it easy for visitors to communicate and
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confusion
 can be hindered. The bad side is that the local
language
 will die.
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this
 can be stopped if the regional
language
 is still used in their daily
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grammar
There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases that should be addressed. For example, 'resulting to English as the only language' should be 'resulting in English becoming the only language'.
task response
Consider adding more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This could help illustrate the points more vividly and make your essay more convincing.
coherence
Transitions between paragraphs are generally good but could be made smoother with the use of more linking phrases or transitional sentences.
introduction
Your introduction is clear and successfully sets up the issue to be discussed.
task response
The essay provides a balanced view, offering both advantages and disadvantages of the topic.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and provides a clear closing statement.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Lexical
  • Global language
  • Improved communication
  • Understanding
  • Economic benefits
  • Educational opportunities
  • Information and knowledge
  • Global business
  • Professional opportunities
  • Cultural diversity
  • Linguistic heritage
  • Linguistic inequality
  • Language and power imbalance
  • Limited access to information
  • Threat to minority languages
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