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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 graph chart
dispicts
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depicts
status
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the status
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 of the city population in four Asian countries (Philipines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) in
percents
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percent
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 from 1970 to 2040 (with forecast to two decades - 2030 and 2040). At
the
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apply
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first
sight
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sight,
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 it seems that the
quontity
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quality
 of
the
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apply
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people living in the cities has
rising
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risen
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 in all of the countries. It seems right to me to divide
this
 data into two groups. The first group,
contains
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containing
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 Malaysia and Indonesia,
demonstraites
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demonstrates
stable
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a stable
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 rise
due to
 the period of 70 years without changes and picks. In
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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 the city population
grows up
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is growing
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 gradually from 30% in 1970 to 75% in 2020, with the prediction of
additional
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an additional
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 rise
up
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of up
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 to 81% in 2040. In
sum
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sum,
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 it reaches the increasing of more than 50%. In
Indonesia
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Indonesia,
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 the
raise
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rise
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 is quite the same - like 50%,
started
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starting
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 from 12% in 1970, with the point of modern
knowlege
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knowledge
 of 50% in 2020, and prediction of additional growth of 10% ( in total 48%) in the next two decades. The members of the second group are Thailand and
Philipines
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the Philipines
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. In
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the Philipines
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Philipines
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Philippines
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 we can see the first
pick
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peak
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 in 1990 of
almoust
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almost
 50% (increased from 32% in 1970), after that percentage of
city
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the city
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 population decreased to 40% in 2010, and started to rise gradually with the prediction of 50% in 2040. In Thailand
it
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there
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 was
the
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a
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 stable minimal growth from 18% in 1970 to 28% in 1990, and after that stable
plato
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period
due to
 the 30 years with 29% in 2020. But they are predicting
the
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a
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 sharp increase from 29% to 49% in the next 20 years.
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