You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the problems explain what type of room you would prefer
Dear Sir or Madam,
i
am writing Change the capitalization
I
this
letter in regerds
to the severe problems Correct your spelling
regards
in
face in my college Correct your spelling
I
hostel
room
. I have been in this
room
for less than a year now and things keeps
getting worse and Change the verb form
keep
woser
as the day goes by.
My name is Correct your spelling
worse
keziah
boye studying Nursing and Change the capitalization
Keziah
currently
in Add a missing verb
am currently
my
second semester of my first year in Change the pronoun
the
the
college. I moved in into the Correct article usage
apply
hostel
room
on the 1st of January 2024, and icurrently
share it with another Correct your spelling
currently
I currently
room mate
.
The Correct your spelling
roommate
hostel
room
's windows are very difficult and open and currently
we have a broken window which we have Add a comma
currently,
writen
for it to get fixed but to no avail. Correct your spelling
written
In addition
to that the walls of the room
has
not been painted , we were told Change the verb form
have
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
will
be painted before we Wrong verb form
would
move
in and Wrong verb form
moved
also
the electrical ports in the rooms do not work , this
has made it diificult
Correct your spelling
difficult
in
Change preposition
to
studing
.
I would like to request for a new Correct your spelling
study
hostel
room
. I want a room
that has been painted and also
has woring
Correct your spelling
working
elctrical
ports and Correct your spelling
electrical
also
with accessible windows to allow for light and fresh air.
Hope to hear from you soon. thank you.
yours sincerely
keziah
.Change the capitalization
Keziah
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task achievement
Pay close attention to spelling and grammatical errors. For example, correct 'regerds' to 'regards' and 'woser' to 'worse'.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about the severity of the problems and how they affect daily life to make a stronger case for moving.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve readability.
task achievement
You provided clear descriptions of the issues you are facing, covering multiple aspects like windows, painting, and electrical ports.
coherence cohesion
Your letter follows a logical structure, starting with an introduction, followed by the problems, and ending with a request.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite