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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the current layout of
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southwest airport
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Southwest Airport
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 and the plans for next year’s construction.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
departure
lounge
 will be expanded and the walkway replaced with a sky train,
along with
 extra facilities in the
departure
 and arrival areas. Perhaps the most significant change to be made to the
ariport
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airport
 is the dramatic increase in the number of
departure
 gates, from 8 to 18, and by proxy, will necessitate the expansion of the main
departure
lounge
 by adding two extensions, each with six gates.
Additionally
, the original
departure
lounge
 is presently traversed by a walkway,
whereas
 in the future passengers will be able to use an internally housed sky train to access the planned diagonally positioned lounges
at the end
 of the original
lounge
. Prior to entering the main passenger
lounge
,
travelers
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 currently pass through passport control without having access to any sort of shopping area;
however
, after the
refurnishment
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refurbishment
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, shops will be added in the space between the
lounge
 and the passport security area.
This
 focus on better serving passengers will
also
 be replicated in the public areas of the airport where a second cafe
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 and an ATM will be installed,
as well as
 a car-hire amenity for arrivals.
Finally
, the check-in counter will be moved to the right side of the
departure
 hall
while
 a new baggage drop-off facility is slated to be made available on the left side.
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task achievement
Ensure that all points of comparison are mentioned clearly and concisely. While the essay does a good job, minor points about the cafe and ATM could be clearer.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph transitions for smoother flow; for instance, linking the increase in gates to the expanded departure lounge could be made more explicit.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive comparison of the current and future plans of the airport layout.
coherence cohesion
Good use of complex sentence structures and appropriate vocabulary.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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