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The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the comparison of three fossil fuels that affected
carbon
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 emissions in the UK from 1990 to 2010. It can be seen that coal dominantly contributed the greenhouse
gas
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 in 1990 and 1995,
while
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gas
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 had the biggest amount of production from 2000 to 2010. In 1990, coal produced 310
million
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tons
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 of
carbon
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 source, and 280
million
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tons
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 of
gas
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 in 1995.
In contrast
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,
gas
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 had the least amount of contribution, accounting for 220
million
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tons
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 in 1990 and marked up by 50
million
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tons
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 in 1995.
Furthermore
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, the highest contributor of
carbon
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 footprint in 2000, 2015 and 2010 was
gas
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 fuel, with 300
million
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tons
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 in 2000, and added up by 10
million
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tons
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 in the next two periods.
Conversely
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, coal was marked as the lowest source of
the
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apply
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carbon
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 footprint from 2000 to 2010, with 220
million
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tons
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 and 180
million
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tons
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 of production respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, gas, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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