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The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion.

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It is argued by some that
the
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cheap airline
tickets
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, which
allows
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people
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 to
travel
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 worldwide
is
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 a good trend, whilst others believe it is a negative. Inexpensive
tickets
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 may provide an opportunity for
people
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 to explore different nations and expand their social network.
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, the excessive
number
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 of travellers might cause to enlargement of litter
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the
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any corner of
country
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the country
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, contributing to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of nature. On the one hand,
low cost
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low-cost
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tickets
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 may give an opportunity for a
number
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 of
people
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 to
travel
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 around the globe.
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 to say, the
tickets
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 might be affordable to everyone, especially lower-status individuals who could dream it.
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, despite the vacations in
native
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 country, that used to be planned, now
people
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 can be given an opportunity to
travel
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 abroad, exploring cultures.
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, the Aviasales, airline company provides as
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 cheap
tickets
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 as possible in Kazakhstan.
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, travellers can expand their social network by making international friends. All these possibilities can develop
people
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’s outlook about the World, which I believe
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this
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can be a positive development.
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, it might bring more international
people
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 with different manners, either law-abiding or worse.
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, these
people
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 can behave negatively towards
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the environment, namely
littering
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by littering
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. To illustrate,
French
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the French
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 parliament estimated the total amount of garbage over the few years
,
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 and claimed that there has been more garbage than
the
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in the
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last
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 years,
due to
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a
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the
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number
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 of tourists. Currently, states are looking forward
for
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 the solutions, restricting some popular avia companies,
recommending
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and recommending
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 cheap
tickets
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. In conclusion,
while
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 cheap
tickets
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 allow more
people
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 to
travel
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, it might cause a
number
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 of problems, especially related to the environment.
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,
this
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 can be tackled with detailed solutions providing special penalties.

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Task achievement
Improve your grammatical range and accuracy. Avoid small errors such as incorrect usage of articles and prepositions. For instance, 'cause to enlargement of litter' should be 'cause the enlargement of litter.'
Task achievement
Work on presenting your ideas more clearly and concisely. Sometimes, the sentences are too complex and could be misunderstood. Simplifying sentence structure can enhance clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Better structure your essay by linking your ideas more effectively. Using more cohesive devices can ensure that your argument flows more smoothly.
Task achievement
You have presented a balanced discussion by covering both positive and negative aspects of low-cost airlines.
Task achievement
Inclusion of specific examples, such as the mention of the French Parliament and Aviasales, adds depth to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the discussion and reinforces your opinion, showing a good understanding of essay structure.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Global mobility
  • Convenience
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural exchange
  • Enhanced connectivity
  • Drawbacks
  • Sustainable travel
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