The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion.
It is argued by some that
the
cheap airline Correct article usage
apply
tickets
, which allows
Correct subject-verb agreement
allow
people
to travel
worldwide is
a good trend, whilst others believe it is a negative. Inexpensive Change the verb form
are
tickets
may provide an opportunity for people
to explore different nations and expand their social network. Nevertheless
, the excessive number
of travellers might cause to enlargement of litter at
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in
the
any corner of Remove the article
apply
country
, contributing to Add an article
the country
destruction
of nature.
On the one hand, Add an article
the destruction
low cost
Add a hyphen
low-cost
tickets
may give an opportunity for a number
of people
to travel
around the globe. That is
to say, the tickets
might be affordable to everyone, especially lower-status individuals who could dream it. Also
, despite the vacations in native
country, that used to be planned, now Add an article
the native
people
can be given an opportunity to travel
abroad, exploring cultures. For instance
, the Aviasales, airline company provides as more
cheap Correct quantifier usage
many
tickets
as possible in Kazakhstan. Furthermore
, travellers can expand their social network by making international friends. All these possibilities can develop people
’s outlook about the World, which I believe this
can be a positive development.
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apply
On the other hand
, it might bring more international people
with different manners, either law-abiding or worse. In other words
, these people
can behave negatively towards to
the environment, namely Change preposition
apply
littering
. To illustrate, Change preposition
by littering
French
parliament estimated the total amount of garbage over the few yearsCorrect article usage
the French
,
and claimed that there has been more garbage than Remove the comma
apply
the
Change preposition
in the
last
years, due to
a
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the
number
of tourists. Currently, states are looking forward for
the solutions, restricting some popular avia companies, Change preposition
to
recommending
cheap Correct word choice
and recommending
tickets
.
In conclusion, while
cheap tickets
allow more people
to travel
, it might cause a number
of problems, especially related to the environment. However
, this
can be tackled with detailed solutions providing special penalties.Submitted by mako_09.01 on
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Task achievement
Improve your grammatical range and accuracy. Avoid small errors such as incorrect usage of articles and prepositions. For instance, 'cause to enlargement of litter' should be 'cause the enlargement of litter.'
Task achievement
Work on presenting your ideas more clearly and concisely. Sometimes, the sentences are too complex and could be misunderstood. Simplifying sentence structure can enhance clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Better structure your essay by linking your ideas more effectively. Using more cohesive devices can ensure that your argument flows more smoothly.
Task achievement
You have presented a balanced discussion by covering both positive and negative aspects of low-cost airlines.
Task achievement
Inclusion of specific examples, such as the mention of the French Parliament and Aviasales, adds depth to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the discussion and reinforces your opinion, showing a good understanding of essay structure.
Your opinion
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