The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion.

It is argued by some that
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cheap airline
tickets
, which
allows
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people
to
travel
worldwide
is
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a good trend, whilst others believe it is a negative. Inexpensive
tickets
may provide an opportunity for
people
to explore different nations and expand their social network.
Nevertheless
, the excessive
number
of travellers might cause to enlargement of litter
at
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the
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any corner of
country
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, contributing to
destruction
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of nature. On the one hand,
low cost
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tickets
may give an opportunity for a
number
of
people
to
travel
around the globe.
That is
to say, the
tickets
might be affordable to everyone, especially lower-status individuals who could dream it.
Also
, despite the vacations in
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country, that used to be planned, now
people
can be given an opportunity to
travel
abroad, exploring cultures.
For instance
, the Aviasales, airline company provides as
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cheap
tickets
as possible in Kazakhstan.
Furthermore
, travellers can expand their social network by making international friends. All these possibilities can develop
people
’s outlook about the World, which I believe
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can be a positive development.
On the other hand
, it might bring more international
people
with different manners, either law-abiding or worse.
In other words
, these
people
can behave negatively towards
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the environment, namely
littering
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. To illustrate,
French
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the French
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parliament estimated the total amount of garbage over the few years
,
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and claimed that there has been more garbage than
the
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last
years,
due to
a
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number
of tourists. Currently, states are looking forward
for
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the solutions, restricting some popular avia companies,
recommending
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and recommending
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cheap
tickets
. In conclusion,
while
cheap
tickets
allow more
people
to
travel
, it might cause a
number
of problems, especially related to the environment.
However
,
this
can be tackled with detailed solutions providing special penalties.
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Task achievement
Improve your grammatical range and accuracy. Avoid small errors such as incorrect usage of articles and prepositions. For instance, 'cause to enlargement of litter' should be 'cause the enlargement of litter.'
Task achievement
Work on presenting your ideas more clearly and concisely. Sometimes, the sentences are too complex and could be misunderstood. Simplifying sentence structure can enhance clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Better structure your essay by linking your ideas more effectively. Using more cohesive devices can ensure that your argument flows more smoothly.
Task achievement
You have presented a balanced discussion by covering both positive and negative aspects of low-cost airlines.
Task achievement
Inclusion of specific examples, such as the mention of the French Parliament and Aviasales, adds depth to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the discussion and reinforces your opinion, showing a good understanding of essay structure.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Global mobility
  • Convenience
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural exchange
  • Enhanced connectivity
  • Drawbacks
  • Sustainable travel
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