Some authorities
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a Correct article usage
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beliefReplace the word
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that cutting-edge
technology
has made shopping simpler,
while
others believe in the opposite way. I certainly argue that modern
technology
has made life tougher and easily accessible to personal information about
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in terms of shopping.
This
essay will discuss both views and state my own opinion.
On the one hand, in today's world
people
who
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work for long hours cannot find any time to purchase their
needsCorrect word choice
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physically about their homes or personal care.
As a result
of
thisCorrect determiner usage
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mandatories, they have been complaining that they cannot manage their
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and reach
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balance
aboutChange preposition
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their personal and work lives.
For instance
,
according to
recent research, doctors could not go
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market for the ingredients in
themselfCorrect pronoun usage
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diet but "thanks to today's
technology
they easily access the things which they want and eat healthier." they said.
On the other hand
, old
people
who Correct pronoun usage
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do not know how to use
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technological devices for their needs and because of that modern
technology
has made shopping harder for them.
Additionally
, they are open to treatment from criminals.
Nevertheless
, shopping online might lead to numerous law
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about cyber-crimes. Result of the
of personal information,
individual'sChange noun form
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credit or debit
card'sChange noun form
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data would be accessible
forChange preposition
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criminals.
This
situation certainly causes thousands of mature
people
lostChange the verb form
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their whole many and never trust
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technology
anymore and they do not prefer
to Change preposition
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shopping online.
According to
Oxford University's research, the population of old
people
in the USA had a
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percentage, at 70%, about do not prefer to
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markets and stores for shopping because they do not have technological knowledge.
In terms of my view, I certainly believe that when these issues occur
people
lostWrong verb form
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their self-confidence and it leads to social anxiety.
For instance
, millions of doctors suggest their patients go to stores for shopping.
Because itCorrect word choice
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has been proved that shopping
withChange preposition
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crowded
placeFix the agreement mistake
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with other individuals
improveCorrect subject-verb agreement
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the emotional intelligence
toChange preposition
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people
.
In conclusion, in the modern world,
technology
presentChange the verb form
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numerous opportunities for
people
besides
the determination
theirChange preposition
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trust and causes a lot of law
issueFix the agreement mistake
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.
This
law
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would be harmful to
people
and cause a lot of
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which could
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society. Because of these reasons, I definitely disagree with
this
view.