The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line chart illustrates information about the total of attendees for 5 various activities at a specific social centre in Melbourne, Australia over a 20-year
period
between 2000 and 2020
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of
participants
in the
Film
Club
had the most
members
during the
period
from 2000 to 2020.
According to
the data, in the first year, the
film
club
had 65
members
which was the most figures,
while
the
number
of
participants
in marital art was 35. The
number
of
participants
in the
Film
club
declined slightly by 5
members
in the next 10 years,
however
, there was an insignificant growth in marital art from 35 to 39 attendees. There was an increase back to the original
number
in both activities including marital art and
film
club
(35
participants
and 65
participants
). Looking at the line graph, there were 15
participants
in tennis in 2000, after which the numbers surged to 55 in 2020. In the first 5 years, the
number
of
participants
in musical performances was zero
however
it had a dramatic increase to 15
members
at the end
of the
period
.
In contrast
, the total of attendees in Amateur had a slight rise in the first 5 years,
nonetheless
, it dropped by 20
members
during the
period
from 2000 to 2020 at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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