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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newton between 1980 and 1966.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newton between 1980 and 1966.
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The
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 chart presents the
complaint
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 numbers about
noise
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 from different sources reported to authorities of Environmental Health of Newton city from 1980 and 1966. R
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,the highest
number
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 of
noise
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complaints
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 comes from domestic or household,
while
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 the lowest is from road construction.It is clearly seen that the
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complaint
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complaints
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 made about
noise
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 from factories
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 not change much;its
number
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 has remained stable.Interestingly,the trend of
noise
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complaints
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 about traffic is similar to household
noise
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,but it is lower than that
domestic
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of domestic
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. In 1980, 500
complaints
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 about
noise
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 from
household
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households
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 were reported.
This
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 remained unchanged until 1984 before the drop to 400 where it
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 stable
to
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until
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 1988.
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,the
complaint
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number
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 of
this
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noise
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 surged to the peak of 1200 in 1996, which was seen as the
hightest
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highest
complaint
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number
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 of all
complaints
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 about
noise
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 in Newton. But, the
number
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 of
noise
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complaints
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 about traffic in 1980 started at 300 stable
to
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in
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 1984 before
came
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coming
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 to 600 in 1996. The
number
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 of
noise
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complaints
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 about factories at 400 and
increase
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increased
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 to 500 in 1986 it is stable to 1996. It is
clearly
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 that the
number
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 of
noise
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complaints
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 about road works continuously from more than 600 in 1980 dropped to about 100 in 1966.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaint, noise, number, complaints with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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