Television, newspaper, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, there have been tons of show programmes delivering entertainers' everyday

lives

. Some consume these programmes without any thoughts,

while

others are concerned about issues that could be prompted by the focused interest in

celebrities

'

lives

. I totally agree with the latter argument.

This

essay will demonstrate why I believe the statement. First of all, the public can be depressed by comparing their

lives

with those of famous figures.

For instance

, as the Korean parenting reality programme that shows how actors raise their children became popular, many parents in Korea felt guilty with their children that they could not support their kids

as well as

the actors do. Admittedly, individuals can get some tips to care

their

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children through the programme,

however

, it is not the only source to get them. The excessive exposal of entertainers' personal

lives

can make individuals dissatisfied with their current states, which can cause social inequality.

In addition

,

celebrities

who present their private

lives

through various media can be potential victims of a serious crime.

For example

, some idols who introduced their house to fans through social media suffered from stalking crimes. With the rapid advancement of information technology, everything in their private area

that is

viewed through media can be a trigger of unexpected dangerous situations.

Therefore

, producers should keep that in mind when picturing entertainers' private

lives

.

To conclude

, too much highlight on

celebrities

' personal

lives

can cause problems for both viewers and

celebrities

. Since

this

can cause damage to

individual

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and society

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, It is necessary to seek balance when presenting famous figures'

lives

.