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The graph below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The graph below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The diagram shows how electricity is produced by geothermal
energy
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. There are five general steps in
this
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 process.
First,
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in a big box connected underground, cold
water
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 is accumulated in
order
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 to be pumped down about 4.5 km. After that,
water
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 is heated passing through hot rocks called
Geothermal
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a Geothermal
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 zone and it is pumped up in
order
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 to be
condensered
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condensed
 in a big
conteiner
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container
. At
this
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 point,
water
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 is in a gas state and it is put in a turbine which moves it in
a circle movements
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a circle movement
circle movements
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.
Then
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, the final step is to use a generator in
order
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to
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for to
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water
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 be powered and
energy
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 can be produced.
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Finally
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Finally,
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energy
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 is
transladated
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translated
 to
a
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an
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energy
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 tower.
Overall
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, the geothermal power plant is used to create
energy
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 in some steps: heating cold
water
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 by a geothermal zone and
condensering
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condensing
 it in
order
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 to put it in a generator turbine which is who produces the
energy
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 to be used.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water, order with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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