The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
employment
among the people in six countries
, which are Australia, Switzerland, Iceland
, the UK, New Zealand and the USA over the period of ten years from 1995 to 2005. Overall
, it is clear that
the percentage of employed men
in 2005 was higher than women
, while
the employment
rate
of Iceland
men
and women
in 2005 was the highest among the other countries
.
According to
the data, the employment
rate
of men
in all countries
in 1995 varied between the lowest of 52% in the UK and the highest of 70% in Iceland
. Furthermore
, the employment
rate
of men
in all countries
increased in 2005, ranging from nearly 70% in Australia to around 82% in Iceland
, making it the largest percentage of male employment
rate
during the period compared to the other five countries
.
Similarly
, the employment
rate
of women
in all countries
saw an increase from 1995 to 2005 as well as
the rate
of men
. The employment
rate
of women
in 1995 was fewer
than Correct word choice
lower
men
during the same year, ranging from around 27% in New Zealand to about 55% in Switzerland. However
, the proportion rose ten years later, albeit not as much as the growth of employed males, between 39% in Australia to approximately 68% in Switzerland, making Swiss women
consistently the highest percentage of employment
in both years, compared to the remaining five nations.Submitted by michellyonggo on
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