The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
employment
among the people in six
countries
, which are Australia, Switzerland,
Iceland
, the UK, New Zealand and the USA over the period of ten years from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the percentage of employed
men
in 2005 was higher than
women
,
while
the
employment
rate
of
Iceland
men
and
women
in 2005 was the highest among the other
countries
.
According to
the data, the
employment
rate
of
men
in all
countries
in 1995 varied between the lowest of 52% in the UK and the highest of 70% in
Iceland
.
Furthermore
, the
employment
rate
of
men
in all
countries
increased in 2005, ranging from nearly 70% in Australia to around 82% in
Iceland
, making it the largest percentage of male
employment
rate
during the period compared to the other five
countries
.
Similarly
, the
employment
rate
of
women
in all
countries
saw an increase from 1995 to 2005
as well as
the
rate
of
men
. The
employment
rate
of
women
in 1995 was
fewer
Correct word choice
lower
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than
men
during the same year, ranging from around 27% in New Zealand to about 55% in Switzerland.
However
, the proportion rose ten years later, albeit not as much as the growth of employed males, between 39% in Australia to approximately 68% in Switzerland, making Swiss
women
consistently the highest percentage of
employment
in both years, compared to the remaining five nations.
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  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparative analysis
  • trends and patterns
  • economic factors
  • stability and change
  • sector-specific
  • job market
  • workforce participation
  • fluctuations
  • economic growth
  • unemployment
  • recession
  • boom
  • labor market dynamics
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