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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.
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The given table compares the consumption of five different types of fast
food
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 namely Hamburger, Fried Chicken, Salad, Fried
Rise
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Rice
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 and Noodles from 2005 to the present time and its prediction in 2025. Unit is measured by
number
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 of eaten per year.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
Hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and Fried Chicken are the most popular means of fast
food
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 in the past and
predicted
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are predicted
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 to grow in the future.
In contrast
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, despite
of
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apply
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being projected to increase in
number
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, Fried Rice and Noodles
is still be
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is still
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 the least popular fast
food
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 among the others. Regarding
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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 and Fried Chicken, the
number
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of
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apply
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eaten
are
Verb problem
has
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 consistently around 38 from the past up until now and projected to experience a moderate increase
around
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to around
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 48 in 2025.
Additionally
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, Salad’s
number
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 has tripled from it was in 2005 about 15 and is expected to rise up to 41 in 2025. In terms of Fried Rice and Noodles, as the least popular means of fast
food
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, they are only estimated to increase a half of
its
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their
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number
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 in the past, from 6 in 2005 to 9 in 2025.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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