The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The process diagram illustrates how instant
noodles
are produced. The whole production process takes eight stages
for
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completion
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.
Overall
, it commenced
flour
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been
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stored in the
silo's
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and ends with labelling plus sealing and into the market. To start with, the flour is transferred into the storage
silo's
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and later into the mixer where water and soil are added
onto
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it. When mixing is done they're transferred to the
dough
sheets after rollers
has
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been used to roll up the
dough
. The production continues to the
dough
stripes.
Finally
, from the
dough
stripes, they
then
channeld
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channelled
changed
into a
noodles
disc where cooking is done by oil and drying.
After
this
process
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the
dough
is transferred into cups where vegetables and
noodles
spices
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and spices
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are added to. The spice and
noodles
in the cups are processed in the final stage for
labeling
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and sealing,
then
comes
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out as
a
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apply
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complete
parkages
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package
packages
and
available
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are available
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in the markets, shops and supermarkets for buyers and sellers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, dough with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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