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The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table charts shows financial data
sales
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for sales
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 of two products ( coffee and bananas) between 1999 and 2004 in
UK
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the UK
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, DENMARK, SWEDEN, BELGIUM AND
SWITZERLAND
. the unit is measured in millions
in
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of
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euros
.
Overall
,
Switzerland
 made the highest
sales
in
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of
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 bananas in 2004 and
UK
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the UK
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has
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apply
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benefited the most from selling coffee in 1999.
To begin
 with,
UK
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the UK
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 sold 1.5million
euros
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of
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coffee in 1999 and rose to 20
millions
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million
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 in 2004, There was
significant
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a significant
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increased
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increase
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.
Switzerland
 sold 3
million
 in 1999 with double
sales
 in 2004 to 6
million
. Denmark and Belgium slightly
increase
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increased
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 from 1.8 -2
million
 and 1-1.7
million
euros
 in 2004. Sweden did not show much profit from 0.8 to 1
million
 which
worth
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is worth
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 nothing. From the second table,
Switzerland
trippled
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tripled
it's
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its
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sales
 from
15million
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15 million
 to 47
million
 in 2004 and earned the highest profit.
UK
 Belgium made
minimum
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a minimum
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 profit of 4
million
 and 5.5
million
 in 2004.
In contrast
, Denmark and Sweden Saw a decrease from 1.8
million
 to 1
million
euros
 and 2
million
euros
 to 0.9
million
euros
 respectively in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, uk, switzerland, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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