The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada

The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of four different means of transportation used by travellers in European nations between 1950 and 1990.
Overall
, the use of buses and walking were less popular
while
people were more likely to rely on cars. The rate of buses did not make a significant change. Starting with the graphs which showed dynamic shifts, cars experienced a radical increase from 5% in 1950 to 25% in 1970.
Furthermore
, it continued to rise to reach the highest at just below 40% in 1990, becoming the most common transportation.
In contrast
, walking on foot was much less popular with slightly above 5% in 1990 than in 1950 when it was the most dominant with just below 40% and in 1970 with just over 30%. Turning to the graphs which indicate milder changes, bikes seemed to reduce their usage as they dropped gradually from about 28% in 1950 to slightly over 20 % in 1970.
Then
, it kept declining until it
finally
hit the bottom at 5% in 1990, making it the least important.
Lastly
, buses experienced a small rise, reaching approximately 25%
although
they started to show a downward trend as they dropped to nearly the same level in 1990 as in 1950.
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