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You have won a holiday to Hawaii with one extra ticket. Write a letter to someone to invite them along with you. In the letter:– Explain what has happened and that you would like them to come – Give details of when the trip will take place – Inform the person of the things they will need for the trip

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Hi John, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to invite you to
Hawaii
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a Hawaii
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trip
along
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apply
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with me.
Firstly
, my company recently celebrated
the
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its
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 20th anniversary with a
day long
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day-long
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events
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event
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where all the employees were invited to the company headquarters. We had multiple activities which
includes
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included
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 football, basketball and
lucky
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a lucky
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 draw for a
trip
 to Hawaii. Fortunately, my name was selected in the lucky draw. The winner gets two tickets for a
trip
 and I want to invite you for
this
trip
.
Moreover
,
this
trip
 is planned between Oct 5th - 9th. Hope you will make yourself free for
this
 wonderful
trip
. As you know, Hawaii is well known for
it's
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its
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 clear water beaches and water
sport
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sports
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 activities.
This
 ticket includes multiple activities jet skies, scuba diving and
para gliding
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paragliding
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.
Thus
, please make sure you bring
suficient
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sufficient
 summer clothing, goggles and casual
wears
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wear
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. Please feel free to
conatct
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contact
 me if you have any questions or need
further
 information. Your loving friend, William
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task achievement
Include a brief description of how much you look forward to the trip to enhance the emotional connection in the invitation.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread for minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'sufficient,' 'it's,' and 'contact.'
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and inviting tone, which is suitable for the context.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logically organized, with clear paragraphs for each main point.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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