Many young people today know more about international pop or movie stars than about famous people in the history of their own country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people's interest in famous people in the history of their country?

Nowadays,
younger
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generation
prefer
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to know more about
the
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international popular artists and movie stars rather than about
hero
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heroes
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or famous
people
in their
history
. There are two reasons
of
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this
condition which are unawareness and
uninterested
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of the
people
and
then
,
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and advices
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advices
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pieces of advice
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to tackle
this
situation will be elaborated below. Knowing about the
hero
can give many benefits for many
people
.
For example
, the students who respect Kartini,
they
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will pursue an education until the high level.
However
, many individuals
do nt
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don't
know about the
hero
in their countries because
usually
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many individuals think that
history
is
boring
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a boring
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subject. So, after finishing class, there are no
people
who learn or read again about the
biography
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biographies
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of the heroes in their city. There are some solutions which can be implemented by the
people
.
The
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first,
the teacher can
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the advancement of technology to make teaching more interactive, so the students will be more interested
with
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in
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this
subject. As an example, the tutors can use an application
such
as Quizziz to introduce the
hero
in their countries.
Besides
, the local communities can
also
make an event to enhance the
people
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people's
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awareness about the importance of knowing the
hero
.
Therefore
, there are more
people
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who realized
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realized
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realise
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that
this
is crucial to learn about the
hero
rather than just
know
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knowing
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about the international pop and movie stars.
To sum up
, there are two reasons why some
people
know more about
the
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apply
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famous artists rather than heroes in the past. The first reason because many
people
think that
history
is
boring
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a boring
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subject.
Besides
, there are no interests from a lot of
people
to search and learn about it.
This
situation can be tackled by using interactive methods in
history
teaching and
also
making some festivals or events by local communities.
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