The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada

The pie chart below shows information about world water resources and the bar chart shows the ultilization of water in egypt, saudi arabia and canada
The pie
chart
below represents the global
water
distribution and the histogram shows how
water
is used in Egypt, Saudi Arabia, and Canada.
Overall
, the
all
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water
pie
chart
shows that most of the world is salt
water
,
while
the second
chart
shows that only a tiny fraction of all
fresh
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freshwater
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water
is on the surface. Moving on to the bar
chart
, it is easily noticeable that Egypt and Saudi Arabia
uses
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use
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most
their
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water
for agriculture,
while
Canada uses most of its supply for industrial needs. Each pie
chart
represents the compositions of all
water
and fresh
water
, with almost all of the world containing salt
water
, leaving
on
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3% of fresh
water
. Almost four-fifths of the global freshwater supply is frozen in the form of ice and glaciers, and only a hundredth is surface
water
. Looking at the bar
chart
, it could be noted Egypt and Saudi Arabia
spends
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a significant amount of
water
for
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agriculture, with the former using up to 80%,
while
the latter uses about 75%.
In contrast
to the land of the Pharaoh, Canada uses 80% of its
water
for industrial needs.
However
, all 3 countries
uses
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less than 20% domestically.

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