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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Task 1

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Task 1
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The table showing the number of
hours
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 spent by
housewives
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 on
housework
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 from 1920 to 2019 shows interesting dynamics. In 1920,
housewives
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 spent about 50
hours
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 a
week
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 on
housework
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.
However
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, by 1940,
this
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time
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 had decreased to 30-40
hours
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 a
week
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. In
such
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 a short period of
time
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,
housewives
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 managed to reduce the
time
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 spent on cleaning by almost 20
percent
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per cent
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. By 1960, the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 had decreased to 20
hours
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 a
week
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. It is interesting that in the period from 1980 to 2000,
this
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time
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 remained virtually unchanged.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that during
this
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 period there were no technological changes that could simplify household chores.
However
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, by 2019, technological progress has made a significant step forward and the
time
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 spent on
housework
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 has decreased to 10
hours
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 a
week
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. In the future,
this
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time
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 will probably continue to decrease as technology does not stand still and continues to simplify the process of working
on
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at
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 home, which makes life much easier for
housewives
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housewives, housework, week, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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