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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the total number of
export
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items
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, which are fuel, manufactured goods, and food, in a particular country for six years from 2000 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 manufactured goods became the most valuable
export
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 item
at the end
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 of the
period
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 with a fluctuating trend,
while
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 the
export
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value
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 of fuel dominated in the beginning with a downward trend and the
export
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 values of food remained stable.
According to
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 the data, the
export
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value
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 of manufactured goods fluctuated throughout the six-year
period
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. Starting at around 16,000
million
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dollars
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 in 2000, it continued to grow and reached a peak at around 26,000
million
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dollars
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 in 2002.
Although
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 the values decreased significantly in 2003 to slightly below 20,000
million
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dollars
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, it managed to rise in the following years and became the most valuable
export
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items
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 in 2005 compared to the remaining two
items
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, at about 24,000
million
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dollars
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. Meanwhile, fuel was the highest
value
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 in terms of
export
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items
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 at the outset of the
period
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, at approximately 45,000
million
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dollars
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. The values,
however
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, decreased consistently until they fell
down
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to around 20,000
million
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
On the other hand
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, the
export
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value
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 of food remained stable during the
period
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 at around 5,000
million
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dollars
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 each year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, items, period, value, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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