Some people think news has no connection to the people lives. So it is a waste of time to read the news in newspaper and watch television news program. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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These days, technology is developing; so that, you can read, listen, and watch the

news

, yet some people have various ideas about

news

, and in their opinion

news

does not involve people's lives. In fact, spending

time

in newspapers and watching television

news

programs are waste of

time

. I broadly agree with

this

idea because reading or listening to political

news

does not have any effect on our lives, but crime, whether things can help us to change some situations. On the one hand, some

news

such

as crime rate or things that are related to the Earth can help us to avoid some bad evidence.

For instance

, when we know about the offence in our districts,

then

we add some protection devices for our home;

moreover

, we carry some tools with us, or we alter our house to a safe area.

In addition

news

about the weather, earthquakes, and volcanoes help us to change our situation. To illustrate, when we know that tomorrow we are going to have a rainy day, we are carrying a waterproof coat or umbrella.

Also

, when we have knowledge about the

time

of the earthquake we leave dangerous regions.

On the other hand

, we can feel the political alternative;

hence

, we do not listen to or read

news

about it;

besides

, these works are real examples of wasting

time

For instance

, When the dollar price in my country grew ;

then

the cost of every piece of equipment increased, and I understood what happened;

thus

, when I listen to the

news

it is not different from when I do not know the

news

. In conclusion, for some reasons which I present it. In my view the

news

that can help us to improve our lives is good;

however

, other

news

which can sense them do not know about them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

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public opinion
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